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Comments from Aurorarati
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2019-03-09 18:51:11 | From college student to slave - Part 2: The punishment | Thank you both. Hellcat: i completely agree with you. I think I'll need to go back to write it and give it a bit more details whenever the story is a bit too rushed. I think my problem is i have main points/ideas i want to put in the story and i've forgotten to make transitions from one idea to an other. Thank you for that advice i'll definitely work on that. Charmbrights: Yeah it is constructive indeed. Oh really. I thought it was clear because i've made the dialogue separated from the rest of the story with those: « » but i can add stuff in italics next time for sure. Haha oops i didn't noticed that one when i read my story again. I guess next time i'll pass it through an online corrector to be sure ^^ Thank you for your advices, i'll keep that in mind for sure!! |