| 2017-10-09 14:42:10 |
Coping with Retirement, part 4 - Lettie's Brother
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You should really bring the pill into the story line to explain why no one was concerned about pregnancy. Also, David should have the talk that this is a big secret and that they bragged or any adult found out he would be going to jail. Other than those two suggestions I am enjoying the story and love your style of writing. |
| 2017-10-09 14:42:14 |
Coping with Retirement, part 4 - Lettie's Brother
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You should really bring the pill into the story line to explain why no one was concerned about pregnancy. Also, David should have the talk that this is a big secret and that they bragged or any adult found out he would be going to jail. Other than those two suggestions I am enjoying the story and love your style of writing. |
| 2017-10-22 19:16:12 |
The Wife's Dare
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Story was too long and could have been better if the women had used honey and peanut butter to entice the dogs. |
| 2017-10-22 19:16:16 |
The Wife's Dare
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Story was too long and could have been better if the women had used honey and peanut butter to entice the dogs. |
| 2017-10-28 12:25:50 |
Together with Angela Pt3
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Loved the addition of the aunt. Have the kids talk her into and then shaving her pussy. Maybe introduce the aunt teaching the sister the benefits of a vibrating dildo, etc. Maybe the aunt can also bring the mother into the story. You are an excellent story teller and i am sure you have already planned what is next so you do not need my suggestions. Great job, keep it up. |