| 2015-06-25 07:27:50 |
The Vacation Me and Laura part 4
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Hey if you read this story that dead girl will cum on your face no reposting needed =) |
| 2015-07-06 06:02:38 |
Hunt Or Be Hunted
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Holy shit that's a good story keep them coming bro |
| 2015-07-28 00:59:16 |
Discarding A Pitiful Bitch_(1)
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Re-posted the story due to fragrant misspellings and the first time I posted a rough draft not the final version by mistake. Hope you enjoy the story as always I'll love to hear back from you guys =) |
| 2015-07-16 08:21:37 |
Control yourself! - Training a mage in the modern world
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Thanks man =) and yeah I love to keep working with you if it's not to much trouble send me a message you got my email. Any other creative criticism? |
| 2015-07-19 18:07:25 |
Illegal Immigrants_(2)
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It wasn't snuff because the person being fucked wasn't killed rather some random men who really had nothing to do with the main plot of sex prostitution and basically slavery. The story is well written enough to the point I can over look the few grammar errors, but the plot is weak it lacks direction. Seems like you wanted it to be about death and unwarranted violence and evil intentions to certain ethnic groups. That is fine but come on at least make it entertaining to read. I rate it a 4 out of 10 has potential just add more details make the plot have layers and definitions. Make the characters have personalities you know make it readable. |