| 2011-10-03 01:56:25 |
Twins found love. Part1
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Slow down a little. We don't want just an eye witness account. We want to feel it, taste it and smell it. Use all your senses. |
| 2011-10-03 02:12:46 |
Twins found love. Part 2
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Good story but you have got to proof read. He had a 9 inch cock in the first story, now it's 10 inch. Average size of a man is 7 inches. Must be a metric thang. |
| 2011-11-11 23:33:33 |
my summer love
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English aside, this was a good story. However, word spelling, word use, and punctuation make it easier to read and convey your thoughts. Please keep trying. Read some of the better authors on this sight. |
| 2011-12-19 21:01:45 |
Adopted Brother shows kid sister true pleasure
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I liked the story. However, I'm not one of the Grammar Nazis, but you use the word YOUR when you mean YOU'RE it's a contraction of you are. It is just a distraction from the good story line. |
| 2011-12-30 11:36:31 |
Our First Time Together_(1)
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That was a nice story. You mentioned that you had a condom in the beside table but didn't mention putting it on. In the heat of passion, did you forget? Did she get pregnant? |