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Comments from wantingnot
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2019-11-12 09:15:37 | My Logan Part 3_(0) | I find your writing style interesting but when you get to sexual acts you tend to write too much and have the actions move much too quickly. You do push the envelope on developing partnerships. The young girl becomes a part of the sex team without the reader understanding how! |
| 2019-11-13 00:03:42 | The Island Part One | Writing style is comfortable for me but the story which should be interesting is boring. Tell us what's going to happen, what is happening and what happened. The de***********ion/explanation in the three sections form the story and tell the tale and what the players/cast did! |
| 2019-11-13 00:13:45 | The Island Part Two | Yes, complete the story. |
| 2019-11-13 00:28:09 | The Island Part 3_(1) | Lost on a tropical island results in some special problems. Hunger and food: bananas as a meal should cause diarrhea, resulting in water loss and a major lack of energy. It could kill you. There should be something to eat in the forest and there should be some animals since you're in an archipelago which should lend itself to animal migration. Where are the birds? What are they eating? How would they taste? How did the guys use the knife? The clothing? The ship parts? etc. I like that you chose a deserted island. Next time please do a little research. |
| 2019-11-13 23:42:01 | The Diary Of Insanity - Part 1 | Where is the pain? Where is the blood? Was there suppose to be death? I expected it. :Liked as far as you went but wanted and expected the perversity. Do like your control of the language. |