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Comments from naughtydragon
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2020-09-12 01:12:22 | The House on Montague Street | I will admit, I'm torn as to whether I want to see a follow up on this. I like the story. It stands alone well, but the sequels are there and easy. However, the sequels may betray what you did here. Her mother's decision is an important point in the story. Any sequels would naturally want to drift in the direction of that possibility, and most of the readers here would want to see that story, but... |
| 2020-09-12 04:07:52 | Tom's parallel world - 2 | Good chapter. I'm curious about the anatomy of the cats. The way you describe her, they seem more cat, less anthropomorphic, but she kisses like her lips were more human. Also, the ability to give a blowjob would seem to indicate a more human mouth, but you mention her sharp teeth. Looking forward to the next chapter and hoping for a bit more world building. There are a few points where you had the wrong word, in one case two wrong words back to back that didn't make sense in context. Try reading out loud to make sure you have the word you want, and not just a word that spell checker won't catch. If you're using a modern verision of word, try the Text Reader. |
| 2020-09-18 18:07:27 | HOBO 19 & 20 ( The End) | Thank you for sharing this great story. Your writing is top notch. I hope to see you continue to expand your craft. Would really like to see you stretch into a completely different MC. Your MC across all three stories has been so similar as to be virtually identical. He’s a good man, and I like his actions, but they do tend to be a bit emotionally isolated; even more so than most men. Take care, looking forward to next story. |
| 2020-10-01 04:18:27 | The Motorcycle Diaries: Daddy's Harley | Joe, it makes me so happy when you post something new. This was a great story. As always it was told with the perfect amount of attention to detail and a touch of humor. "I checked out the patio after I cleaned up Swamp Thing." That was really good, I'm still chuckling about it hours later. |
| 2020-10-01 04:23:40 | TRAINING ANNALISE, PART 7/CONCLUSION | This was well done. Your attention to the mental and emotional made this story quite enjoyable. So many BDSM fics are about establishing control without any understanding of what they could be doing with a story. This rates up there with stuff by MojaveJoe and MelanieAtPlay for quality of story telling. However, you do need to spend a little more time reviewing. You had several instances of the wrong word or jumbled phrasing, particularly in chapter 7. |